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Out of Sight Out of Mind Essay

Write a 4-5 page essay in which you explain a concept to your reader.  Your explanation will identify and define a focused aspect of the concept as you communicate the significance of your explanation.  Utilize at least one outside source as you develop your explanation.

Skills:

• A Focused Explanation
• Appropriate Explanatory Strategy
• A Clear, Logical Organization
• Smooth Integration of Sources
• Not-So-Fine Print:
• 4-5 pages
• MLA format
• One outside source
• Works Cited page
• Tutoring Evidence

My name is and I will be your tutor for this assignment. Firstly, I would like to thank you for sharing this essay with me. I greatly enjoyed reading it, and feel that it is a strong rough draft. However, I do have a few suggestions to help make the final draft even stronger:

• Be sure you add a header to your documents. This can be accomplished by selecting insert from the drop-down menu, then selecting page numbers. Be sure to also include your last name, as shown above.
• I noticed several instances of comma splices throughout your essay. I am including a link to a useful comma rules guide that will help demonstrate proper comma usage.

https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/692/01/

• Can you focus more on defining the “out of sight, out of mind” concept and how it affects more than your personal life? Why is this concept important for people to grasp?

Overall, your essay is off to a strong start. I hope you find my feedback helpful when revising for your final draft.